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As I'm no longer sure if I want to create this as a game or develop it into a regular story, I have decided to just post it as a concept here and share and get feed back about it. Below you will find the base premise of how the game or story will be about. I will also link in the WIP from years ago from when I was actually still interested in game development. Needless to say from then to know there have been revisions on names and other things. And here is everything so far.

 

Original Game Topic (Not actual original but it is the first game post here. The actual original game post was made on a different site)

Calendar and Year Information

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Characters

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Gods and Demons

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Races and Spoken Languages

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Regions/Cities/Towns/Maps

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Chapter 1 (WIP) Word Count: 797/1000 (Word count includes the "Insert Name of Character" as well. 

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Things that need to be updated and worked on for chapter 1

  • I need to update Shea to the correct new name after the name change. (Aodhán)
  • I need to expand on the upbringing of the main character and introduce him better.
  • I need to figure out a name for the old man and the person who found him and raised him.
  • Anything else that may be pointed out in the more reviews people point out.

 

 

Chapter 2 (Not Started)

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Chapter 3 (Not Started)

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Chapter 4 (Not Started)

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Chapter 5 (Not Started) (End of Book 1)

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Additional Information:

  • Each chapter will be no less than 1000 words.
  • If needed more chapters may be added down the road.
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Hi, i've looked about your story and universe and if you want some feedback about it here :

 

-Not sure if intended but in the chapter 1 we don't even get to know the main character name.

 

-One chapter is to little to judge anything, but if you plan to do more, I cannot recommend you enough to plan ahead and to develop what is interesting to you.

 The years of pickpocketing must have influenced his behavior and development in the more or less long term.

 

-For the universe, i can''t tell much, there is a lot of name wich still use elf instead of druids and there isn't enough matter to get a good idea of what to expect next.

 

 

If recommand you to continue writing. Practice, develop your universe, what make it unique and will make us as reader stay and go to the end of the story.

 

Here's also some site which can help you :

https://azgaar.github.io/Fantasy-Map-Generator/ : A very very good customisable map generator

https://inkarnate.com/ to make very nice map (Not random)

 

http://dndspeak.com/  A lot of ideas to pick to inspire yourself and fill in your world.

 

https://hobbylark.com/writing/Creating-a-New-Fantasy-Race   About races creation and giving more realism to it.

https://www.artstation.com/contests/ancient-civilizations/challenges/14 and a good site with artwork to get more ideas.

 

Also, i strongly recommand you to find unique features for your story and universe.

 

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  On 9/7/2020 at 10:48 PM, Beast Realm said:

 

-For the universe, i can''t tell much, there is a lot of name which still use elf instead of druids and there isn't enough matter to get a good idea of what to expect next.

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As for the names that are still elf they will change over time. Just takes a while for me to actually sit down to edit and update things. But either way I'd like to share what I have so I can get feedback and suggestions on how to improve something. So I appreciate your entire post.

 

The name was left out as I stopped last night and was tired. I've started to go back through and write down ideas on how to make what I have written better already. I'm hoping to have it updated in a few weeks after I fix some other things in my world so far. The reason why what I have is so little in detail is from researching on how to do writing and talking to those that I know who do write (fan fictions or for personal hobby) have all mentioned to just start writing then go back and edit and improve on what you originally wrote done. So everything will be more developed by the next time I update things. Like how the pick pocketing and living on the streets influenced the characters life, behavior etc etc.

 

I'm using Wonderdraft for mapping. It runs native on Linux. I'm still learning how to use it and the map will be updated later down the road. I went with Wonderdraft for the pricing and no monthly or yearly sub like Inkarnate. Yes it has a free version but it is limited and last I tried it, does not allow custom assets.

 

I do appreciate the other links as well. It does give some more things to check out and help develop my world. I use to be a programmer by trade. Though Have always wanted to to finish this story to the end. I lost the passion to do programming roughly two years ago but i have continued on working little by little on this and want to get it finished. As I'm not great at writing it will take some time, though all feedback, suggestions, and help is all appreciated.

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I have updated the first post again. I have updated some of the names and added a few new ones. I'm slowly working on using more Celtic names than Fantasy names. Don't get me wrong, this is a fictional story so some names (mostly the evil kings) will still be elvish/fantasy like. I just really fascinated by the Celtic and Druid culture. It is something I have been looking into for a few months now and really like it and enjoy learning about.

 

I have expanded chapter 1. You can see it here. It still a long way away from being complete. I'm only at 767 words and I still feel like the intro is being rushed. Not to mention I need to expand on how I introduce the main characters name. Its super simple and lame in my eyes. Bur for now for revision 2, I feel like it will do for now. So let me know what y'all think about the changes. Chapters will be a minimum of 1000 words. This will put the story at a minimum of 5000 words. This will put it into a short story categorizations from some searching on google. My end goal is to develop the short story into something bigger with responses from y'all here, friends from discords servers and possibility of sites actually more geared for writing and sharing stories. The end goal is to get within the categorization of a Fantasy Novel which can be up towards 90,000 to 120,000 words. Though that is the end goal. And with help from everyone I think I'll get there as long as I focus... (Focus is the hard part lol)

 

As far as a schedule, I'm hoping to update the chapter and or current released information/lore/background of my world once a week. Either on Sundays or Mondays. This way I don't feel super rushed with trying to do something big once a day. Giving myself a week to update things will allow for me to do better research on parts that still need some better research and ability to add in more lore and back stories on the characters and gods and demons.

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